nice
its cool you are trying to do a new style. i respect that.
in your intro, you used somenotes that were out of the natural minor scale, and i wasn't a fan of them. they kinda give the listener a shudder. but...
your lead was pretty cool.
i am not sure if you had a chorus? If you did. Dimrain47, has his more distinct and noticeable. your song was really linear.
but i definitely can see you making more awesome stuff!